Worn down with 365 wrinkles
Months melted away into memories
Twisted into a bittersweet final night.
Gold edged hills cover the last of the sun,
Weak rays spreading to the waves lapping on my feet
Gradually, we swim through the water
Until we reach the light
Slowly, gold turns to silver, to shadow, to sleep,
While a deep indigo sky
Takes the place of the burning orange
Stars are illuminated by the fading sun
Sips of sweet sugar sustain me,
Through the starlight
Through the last steps the year takes
Through the excitement and chaotic fireworks
A new year bursts through the midnight,
Sprinting through space at a million miles a minute
Falling from the stars and blanketing the world
A quilt of renewed chances, motivation, and hope
Excitement carries us through to dawn
-Lila
Hi Lila
ReplyDeleteI love your First line I really makes you want to read the rest I love how you have added pictures of the sun set. Next time I would love for you to try and add some rhyming words. Other than that I really enjoyed reading your poem, Good job
From Annabelle
I found your poem very interesting. I especially loved your language features like worn down with 365 wrinkles. Maybe next time try harder on your photos.
ReplyDeleteHi Lila,
ReplyDeleteI love your poem it i very good there is nothing that I would fault. I like the way you describe things. I really like how you did a collage of pictures that was a very creative idea. Overall excellent job.
Good Job! :)